My Mother's descriptive writing

Kuraia 03/05/2016

WALT - Write a descriptive story

Success Criteria

• We will use our 5 senses to describe our mum.
• We will use descriptive words like adjectives and adverbs.
• We should choose our Vocabulary carefully.
• We will use Figurative language like similes, Metaphors etc.
• We should organise our ideas using graphic organizers.
• We should re-read our story to make sure it makes sense.

Introduction	1. She is sweet as a lollipop 2. As smart like a computer 3. As buzzy as a bumble bee 4. Her jokes bring a smile to my face.
Sequence of events/Middle Part	1.Screaming to our faces 2.Calm as still trees 3. As fun as a roller coaster. 4 . Thin as a pencil
Conclusion	1.She is one of a kind and hard to find 2.Piece of gold 3. As caring as a nurse.

As I walked into the kitchen, I could smell the succulent piece of gold in the pot. Stomp , stomp as I could hear footsteps following me and it was my mum. Her face was red as she walked through the door,and I had a feeling she was mad. Sweat scrolled down my face as I begin to gain fear. So I slowly walked out the door.

Moments later after dinner we all were watching our favourite show and I could see my mum’s eyes falling into a deep sleep every time she blinks. I took her into bed and she slept all the way through till the morning. When the sunrise I smelt a fantastic bowl of pancake mix being swept into the pan. The answer of 2x2 was how much I would of taken but I saw her eyes staring at me and moved it side to side thinking I had to leave some for my annoying siblings.

Months later mother’s day had appeared. I wondered , what should I have punctual for her hard work she had put in us. I thought and thought and I finally thought that I could write something lovely about her that is meaningly. Dear mum, how could I ever repay you. You bring joy to my face and your jokes are as more funnier than a clown. You are an wonderful and as busy as a bumblebee. Your are as sweet as a lollipop and you are one of a kind and hard to find . Happy mothers day.

My poem was completed , I gave it to my mum and her lips slowly rises as the sun and gave me a big hug with a thankyou face. I was overjoyed to know she appreciated my gift .